Today's #afewwordsaday #KAFWAD submission
Why not join me? Today's prompts are below. Prompts for the rest of the week are in a separate post just below.
12th September 2015
What do you think of my Tanka poems? It's my first attempt. Can you do better?
Opposite: the King's wife was beautiful on the outside but when he looked at her he was filled with horror.
Prompts / date
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12th September 2015
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FMS Photo a day
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opposite
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Text type
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Tanka
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Sentence type
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Irony
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Story
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The Wild Swans
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Irony
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overstates how good or
bad something is, rest of sentence reveals overstated word to be false. Our 'luxury' room turned out to be a farm
building. The 'trip of our dreams' was, in fact, our worst nightmare.
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Tanka
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5-7-5-7-7 last two lines
change pace or tone
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The Six Swans
The king had six sons
His wife turned them into swans
Their sister saved them
She knitted shirts from nettles
and turned them back into men
So this one doesn’t change the tone or pace, let’s try again
with a bit more help from Alan Peat's '50 ways to re-tell a story':
I was a sad girl.
My six brothers were now swans.
I had to save them:
For six years I could not speak
And knitted six nettle shirts.
Better – but no irony…
Six boys and one girl.
one step mum and a cruel spell:
Six swans and one girl.
Six years of knitting nettles.
Six brothers back: just one wing.
Hmm, still no irony. Let’s try just part of the story…
A king, lost, no hope.
An old woman can help him
If he weds her girl.
This ‘worthy and pretty’ girl
Filled our king’s heart with horror.
